My cool weekend
In the weekend I went to the driving range with Cory. At the driving range we got to hit one hundred golf balls. I went first. We got to hit 3 balls each. I hit one really far and then I missed the next one I kept on trying to hit it and then I hit it really far. Then it was Cory’s turn. He missed at first and then he hit it as far as I hit it. After Cory hit his three balls it was my brother Riley’s turn. At first he missed and then he hit one a long distance for his age. After Riley hit his three balls it was my Dad’s turn. My Dad is a really good golfer! He can hit it 220 metres. When he hit his first shot Cory, Riley and I all said, “Whoooooooooooooo!” He hit it 220 metres! Wow that’s a long way! Then it was back to my turn. It kept on going and going and going until there was one last ball standing! My Dad hit it! We all said, “Jake!” The next day I was going to have a soccer tournament at Clendon but the council cancelled it. “What a nuisance,” I said! So after that we went to my Nans for breakfast… we had French toast, yummy bacon and grilled banana! After we had breakfast at Nan’s I had to go to Jo’s party. He’s a Year Three kid.
Wow Zac, what an action packed weekend! I liked the way you expressed yourself and I could sense the excitement at your dad's monster hit - that's because of the way you wrote your sentences.
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When he hit his first shot Cory, Riley and I all said, “Whoooooooooooooo!” He hit it 220 metres! Wow that’s a long way!
I think I could only hit the ball twenty metres.
From Mrs Wallace
What an amazing recount of your weekend! It felt like I was right there with you, from your fantastic descriptive writing! I loved that you could share in the excitement with your brother and friend, and that Mrs Morris and Room 14 could also share in this weekend highlight! Keep up the fantastic work, we are very proud of you! Mum and Dad xx
ReplyDeleteWOW what an amazing weekend you had! It's amazing that your dad can hit a ball 220 METERS! I would fall asleep if I was you as well after that long weekend! I think you would make a really good author when you grow up.
ReplyDeleteWOW! Zach i really like your holiday i wish i was there it seemed really cool!
ReplyDeletehARRY
What an exciting Recount of your Cool Weekend, Zac! You wrote a very long story with the events in sequence...well done!
ReplyDeleteWow lucky Zac. I am really evendice about you. I would probaly sleep for ten hours and 220 METERS WOW what an amazing throw I wish I was you. I really would like to go there and to Jo's party. Looks like you had a day fulled with Exitment and fun. If I were you I would probaly only hit the ball about 10 METERS!!! Well done Zac
ReplyDeleteGreat recount of a fun weekend, Zac.
ReplyDeleteMrs Steel
I really wish I was there Zachary. I would only be able to hit a golf ball about 30 METERS!!! How long did you hit the ball Zachary. Why are soooooooo famous?
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Ryan
Your cool weekend is cool and fun.
ReplyDeleteWow Zach I f I had to hit 100 Golf balls that would be tiring and i could only hit say 20.I never knew that your dad could hit that far.How Far did you and Cory get i bet somthing high.
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